tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6613381033478378817.post8231656236852196921..comments2023-09-12T09:44:56.665-07:00Comments on Lauren Bradley's EDM 310 Blog: Blog Post #11Lauren Bradleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00852414324290768437noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6613381033478378817.post-91092681743967875192013-11-18T19:14:10.497-08:002013-11-18T19:14:10.497-08:00I apologize for being a little late with my commen...I apologize for being a little late with my comment.<br /><br />Great blog post!! The only things you need to fix are the lack of alt/title modifiers on your pictures, and you need to link your readers to all the videos you watched, even the Skype interviews, so they can watch them for themselves if they would like!<br /><br />You also had some typos, so make sure to proofread before you publish!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09090374394712895066noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6613381033478378817.post-92157384636484859832013-11-09T13:05:06.484-08:002013-11-09T13:05:06.484-08:00Hey Lauren! I think you did a great job summarizi...Hey Lauren! I think you did a great job summarizing the Kathy Cassidy videos. It didn't take long for me to see that you have a knack for summarizing in great detail. I think you have a great conversational writing style and that makes for great reading! I have two main suggestions for you. First, try incorporating more of your opinion in your writing. Having a solid summary is good, but too much summary and not enough application of your own ideas masks your great writing style. My other suggestion is that you need to proofread your post a little better. I found several different parts of your post that had grammatical errors in it. In the fourth paragraph second line, the word "it" is capitalized and i'm not sure why. The following sentences didn't make sense: In the seventh paragraph; "Lastly the Nintendo DS are used to decision making and predictions." In the eighth paragraph; "She began wanted to make the computers useful and find information and lessons where the computers could be manipulated by her students." In the tenth paragraph; "Video three picks off with Dr. Strange asking Kathy where you should start, as far as technology in the classroom goes." In this last example I'm assuming picks was meant to be kicks.<br />I am in no way trying to be overcritical of your work and I hope you don't feel like that. I think if you took a little extra time proofreading your work and adding more of your opinion it would make a big difference.Ronald Griffinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05568201054569502430noreply@blogger.com